Below is the script I put together when presenting. I have added a horizontal line at points I will change slides.
Feedback:
Feedback from Sue:
Hero image= lower the title
Project description= include title and shorten text
Long sections= move titles underneath drawings
Plan= axonometric make the same size as the plans
Perspective= needs more atmosphere, colour, texture, dramatic lighting
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